Saturday, December 10, 2011

HAIKU -Rain

I don't like restrictions..when I write poems,I let it flow,don't even care whether it rhymes or not ..but when I first read Haiku,I knew that I have to give it a try.Special thanks to Inspector Sahaab from The Other Side for indirectly introducing me to Haiku.At first it appears a bit hard but as soon as the gate of inspirations open,the words fall right onto the screen..:) So this is my first attempt and I'm desperate for some honest feedbacks (Remember TO BE NICE,okay? :P) On my favorite subject ' RAIN'


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Strange, when the sky weeps

The plant turns another leaf

And the farmer smiles
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  1. Inspector SaahabDecember 10, 2011 at 12:53 PM

    i seem to be the earliest bird, this is something that should be he highlight. hehe

    well, i've told you that you gonna impress others and i'm impressed. very good start. i'm not good in reviewing art work but you have written the good things about rain in this haiku beautifully.
    the rain is a blessing, spreading good news to all mankind, it is a rahmat.

    and and it is such a great honor when you mentioned my blog above. awwwwww.. i'm touched hoho.

    keep writing! :)

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  2. the other side of meDecember 10, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    Thank you adik ;) yes yes you are the first one ..YAY!!

    aww.I ask you to be nice..but you are TOO NICE,,anyways thanks a lot ..yes hujan is rahmat :D never converse in Malay before (excited) I have to mention,I came to know haiku from you :)

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  3. Inspector SaahabDecember 10, 2011 at 1:09 PM

    well i wrote my first haiku just about two weeks ago. never heard about it too before.

    but then this one you came out with good line, correct syllable counts. u must have done research on it i suppose.

    me being too nice? hehe. just wait and hear what will the other readers tell about this.

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  4. the other side of meDecember 10, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    Me too,never heard about it before :)

    Really? yeah I did some homework in the morning and come up with this :) poetry always makes me feel good

    Lets see then ;) Have a nice day boy :D

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  5. Writing BeeDecember 10, 2011 at 2:11 PM

    Lovely!! Three simple sentences which bring out a lot of meaning! In fact it can also be related to how present day people are. They find happiness in another person's sadness :P!!

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  6. RichaDecember 10, 2011 at 2:39 PM

    Sky weeps. :)

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  7. the other side of meDecember 10, 2011 at 2:50 PM

    @writing bee
    Thanks dear..That's the beauty of Haiku..simple words conveys a deep meaning..and you said it well,that's exactly what I meant ..nature teach us a lot ..thanks again..

    @Richa
    the sky weeps and we smile..:)thanks for dropping by :)

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  8. FatimaDecember 10, 2011 at 4:23 PM

    Lovely...not just the eyes but skies too weep :)
    But even then someone delights !!

    Take Care

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  9. Balqis DBJDecember 10, 2011 at 4:45 PM

    This is so nice! You penned your thoughts well. This is indeed a very good start. Looking forward to read more. :)

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  10. the other side of meDecember 10, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    @Fatima
    Thanks dear..You should give a try too :D

    @Balqis
    Hey thanks..haiku is interesting..you have a nice blog there :D

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  11. CookieCrumbsInc.December 10, 2011 at 5:23 PM

    it's different. Nobody thinks of the farmer first when you say rain:) Good one, write more. And I want to try it too, too big a chicken I guess:|

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  12. CяystalDecember 10, 2011 at 6:13 PM

    Strange yet beautiful. Gorgeous and too freaking beautifuuuul. Its the only time when someone crying has so much beauty. :')
    A very good first attempt. Its good, like always <3

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  13. Red HandedDecember 10, 2011 at 6:17 PM

    ooooh what a connection you made!!!
    lOVED IT

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  14. the other side of meDecember 10, 2011 at 9:55 PM

    @PeeVee
    Hey thanks ..the farmer word was a surprise for me too..Yes YOU SHOULD GIVE IT A TRY..pls o_o

    @Crystal
    AWww..thanks baby..me so happy after reading your comment :D thank you thank you..and you shld try too..im sure it will be awesome :)

    @Red
    hey thanksssssssssssssssss a lot ..:D

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  15. KalyanDecember 11, 2011 at 1:07 AM

    lovely words...beautifully crafted lines!

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  16. suvaibaDecember 11, 2011 at 1:10 AM

    wah janeman
    you are awesome - 3 lines dipped in the magic of rain.
    i am crazy for you baby.! :):P
    hugs and kisses..!

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  17. --December 11, 2011 at 7:50 AM

    Bravo! *Clapping hands*

    I just finished commenting on another post of someone that just completed their first haiku also :D I commented further by saying that I'm so inspired by Balqis, Inspector (and now I will add you to my list!) for giving the Haiku another try. I wrote one in 4th grade as a school project so it's high time I tried it again, don't you think? :))

    P.S. ~ How about trying your hand at my Fibonacci Challenge? ;) I just completed my second one. If you read the first one, it has a link to directions for the form.

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  18. Prime AqueDecember 11, 2011 at 2:20 PM

    Great Start my friend! I am must say I am happy to both us because I also tried the haiku writing for the first time last night!

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  19. the other side of meDecember 11, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    @Kalyan
    Thanks :D

    @suvaiba
    Thank you darling ..MwahhhhhhYou are most welcomed to be crazy over me ;)Million kisses..and super tight hugs :D

    @Princess Fiona
    Hey thanks a lot.this is so sweet of you:D yeah Balqis and inspector are awesome..YOU SHOULD GET BACK To haiku..will love to read your :)
    yes yes try HAIKU :D

    P.S...but Fibonacci is hard and long..but I think there's no harm of giving a try..will write one soon :D
    yes will read yours soon

    @Prima Aque
    hey WOW..you wrote Haiku for the first time too..will check out yours soon..Take care my friend,,stay blessed :)

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  20. Ph_December 11, 2011 at 6:00 PM

    I love rain and these lines are simple and lovely <3

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  21. AlcinaDecember 11, 2011 at 6:07 PM

    This is so sweet my cutie pie..and your first attempt doesn't seems like one..You know i tried a lot myself writing one but i failed and never posted it :P and never want to try again..
    but you should write more of them.. :)

    tc
    <3

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  22. monamourDecember 11, 2011 at 10:16 PM

    I suck at rhymes/poems and stuff but I love reading it. Haiku is awesome to read...harder to write :P And your haiku was awwzzmm :D

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  23. the other side of meDecember 12, 2011 at 8:08 AM

    @Ph_
    Rain,they are beautiful..Thanks :)

    @Alcina
    Hey You are here *smiling* Thnks dear..you mean,you have tried that before? ahhh..I guess you shld try it again..it will be awesome

    Thanks dear ..,me love haiku:)

    @NIO
    ahhaa..everyone can write poems :) Haizu is really amazing..Thanks a lot dear..hope to see you around :D

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  24. SagittarianDecember 12, 2011 at 11:31 AM

    Wow!:) Great! Keep sharing!:)

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  25. DaanishDecember 12, 2011 at 1:09 PM

    circle of life !

    Nice :)

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  26. the other side of meDecember 12, 2011 at 4:35 PM

    @sagittarian
    Thanks..and welcome to my blog :)

    @Daanish
    hey thanks :)welcome here

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  27. AnonymousDecember 12, 2011 at 7:38 PM

    very nice, good start! I read many Haiku, but it seems quite hard to make. Thought very good to be able to share ideas in a limited amount of words.
    Looking forward reading more.

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  28. the other side of meDecember 13, 2011 at 9:06 PM

    Thank a lot for the compliment..haiku is just amazing <3will be writing more and more..love ya :D

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  29. Beyond HorizonDecember 21, 2011 at 11:02 PM

    Hey Sweetie, you are good at it.

    Weeps & then smiles :)

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